英语六级17分作文范文批改1
<p> 英语六级待批改作文：</p><p> <span word="In">In</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="contemporary">contemporary</span> <span word="society">society</span>,<span word="people">people</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="invariablely">invariablely</span> <span word="faced">faced</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="some">some</span> <span word="physical">physical</span> <span word="problems">problems</span>.<span word="Despite">Despite</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="fact">fact</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="living">living</span> <span word="conditions">conditions</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="improved">improved</span> <span word="greatly">greatly</span>,<span word="we">we</span> <span word="gained">gained</span> <span word="new">new</span> <span word="hazard">hazard</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="inside">inside</span>.</p><p> <span word="There">There</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="several">several</span> <span word="reasons">reasons</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="cause">cause</span> <span word="these">these</span> <span word="problems">problems</span>.<span word="Its">Its</span> <span word="self">self</span>-<span word="evident">evident</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="there">there</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="work">work</span> <span word="pressures">pressures</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="modern">modern</span> <span word="society">society</span> <span word="than">than</span> <span word="before">before</span>.<span word="Also">Also</span>,<span word="the">the</span> <span word="lack">lack</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="communication">communication</span> <span word="ability">ability</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="key">key</span>.<span word="People">People</span> <span word="today">today</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="likely">likely</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="stay">stay</span> <span word="at">at</span> <span word="home">home</span>,<span word="open">open</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="computer">computer</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="surfing">surfing</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="internet">internet</span>,<span word="other">other</span> <span word="than">than</span> <span word="go">go</span> <span word="outside">outside</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="friends">friends</span>.<span word="Its">Its</span> <span word="definitely">definitely</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="good">good</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="self">self</span>-<span word="development">development</span>,<span word="and">and</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="affects">affects</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="health">health</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="well">well</span>.<span word="Further">Further</span> <span word="more">more</span>,<span word="the">the</span> <span word="high">high</span> <span word="level">level</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="unemployment">unemployment</span> <span word="rate">rate</span>,<span word="the">the</span> <span word="less">less</span> <span word="support">support</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="society">society</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="fast">fast</span> <span word="life">life</span> <span word="style">style</span> <span word="all">all</span> <span word="contribute">contribute</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="psychological">psychological</span> <span word="problems">problems</span>.</p><p> <span word="Our">Our</span> <span word="life">life</span> <span word="owes">owes</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="large">large</span> <span word="debt">debt</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="spirit">spirit</span>,<span word="on">on</span> <span word="condition">condition</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="nothing">nothing</span> <span word="change">change</span>,<span word="well">well</span> <span word="never">never</span> <span word="feel">feel</span> <span word="happy">happy</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="enjoy">enjoy</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="beauty">beauty</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="world">world</span>.<span word="We">We</span> <span word="need">need</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="balance">balance</span> <span word="between">between</span> <span word="life">life</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="job">job</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="escape">escape</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="huge">huge</span> <span word="pressure">pressure</span>,<span word="we">we</span> <span word="need">need</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="contact">contact</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="nature">nature</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="obtain">obtain</span> <span word="support">support</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="outside">outside</span>,<span word="and">and</span> <span word="we">we</span> <span word="need">need</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="healthy">healthy</span> <span word="lifestyle">lifestyle</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="secure">secure</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="positive">positive</span> <span word="mood">mood</span>.</p><p> 英语六级作文批改如下：</p><p> <span word="In">In</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="contemporary">contemporary</span> <span word="society">society</span>, <span word="people">people</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="invariablely">invariablely</span>(拼写错误，改为<span word="invariably">invariably</span>)<span word="faced">faced</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="some">some</span> <span word="physical">physical</span> <span word="problems">problems</span>. <span word="Despite">Despite</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="fact">fact</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="living">living</span> <span word="conditions">conditions</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="improved">improved</span> <span word="greatly">greatly</span>, <span word="we">we</span> <span word="gained">gained</span> <span word="new">new</span> <span word="hazard">hazard</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="inside">inside</span>.</p><p> <span word="There">There</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="several">several</span> <span word="reasons">reasons</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="cause">cause</span> <span word="these">these</span> <span word="problems">problems</span>. <span word="Its">Its</span> <span word="self">self</span>-<span word="evident">evident</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="there">there</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="work">work</span> <span word="pressures">pressures</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="modern">modern</span> <span word="society">society</span> <span word="than">than</span> <span word="before">before</span>. <span word="Also">Also</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="lack">lack</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="communication">communication</span> <span word="ability">ability</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="key">key</span>. <span word="People">People</span> <span word="today">today</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="likely">likely</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="stay">stay</span> <span word="at">at</span> <span word="home">home</span>, <span word="open">open</span>(用词不当，改为<span word="turn">turn</span> <span word="on">on</span>) <span word="the">the</span> <span word="computer">computer</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="surfing">surfing</span>(改为<span word="surf">surf</span>) <span word="the">the</span> <span word="internet">internet</span>, <span word="other">other</span> <span word="than">than</span> <span word="go">go</span> <span word="outside">outside</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="friends">friends</span>. <span word="Its">Its</span> <span word="definitely">definitely</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="good">good</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="self">self</span>-<span word="development">development</span>, <span word="and">and</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="affects">affects</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="health">health</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="well">well</span> .<span word="Further">Further</span> <span word="more">more</span>(<span word="furthermore">furthermore</span>是一个单词), <span word="the">the</span> <span word="high">high</span> <span word="level">level</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="unemployment">unemployment</span> <span word="rate">rate</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="less">less</span> <span word="support">support</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="society">society</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="fast">fast</span> <span word="life">life</span> <span word="style">style</span> <span word="all">all</span> <span word="contribute">contribute</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="psychological">psychological</span> <span word="problems">problems</span>.</p>
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