英语六级2分作文范文的批改2
<p> 英语六级待批改作文:</p><p> <span word="With">With</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="development">development</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="society">society</span>, <span word="there">there</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="increasingly">increasingly</span> <span word="individuals">individuals</span> <span word="who">who</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="got">got</span> <span word="psychical">psychical</span> <span word="disease">disease</span>. <span word="Furthermore">Furthermore</span>, <span word="they">they</span> <span word="also">also</span> <span word="dont">dont</span> <span word="know">know</span> <span word="psychical">psychical</span> <span word="disease">disease</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="lead">lead</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="disease">disease</span>.</p><p> <span word="There">There</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="some">some</span> <span word="reason">reason</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="phenomenon">phenomenon</span>. <span word="Firstly">Firstly</span>, <span word="people">people</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="pressure">pressure</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="heavy">heavy</span> <span word="work">work</span>, <span word="even">even</span> <span word="some">some</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="lose">lose</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="job">job</span>. <span word="They">They</span> <span word="feel">feel</span> <span word="very">very</span> <span word="sad">sad</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="lose">lose</span> <span word="value">value</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="society">society</span>. <span word="Secondly">Secondly</span>, <span word="they">they</span> <span word="lack">lack</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="communication">communication</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="others">others</span>, <span word="and">and</span> <span word="close">close</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="thought">thought</span>. <span word="Because">Because</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="they">they</span> <span word="stay">stay</span> <span word="online">online</span> <span word="when">when</span> <span word="finish">finish</span> <span word="work">work</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="so">so</span> <span word="on">on</span>. <span word="They">They</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="pay">pay</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="attention">attention</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="situation">situation</span>.</p><p> <span word="As">As</span> <span word="far">far</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="am">am</span> <span word="concerned">concerned</span>. <span word="In">In</span> <span word="order">order</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="keep">keep</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="healthy">healthy</span> <span word="psychical">psychical</span> <span word="environment">environment</span>. <span word="They">They</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="do">do</span> <span word="some">some</span> <span word="exercise">exercise</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="free">free</span>-<span word="times">times</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="talk">talk</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="friends">friends</span> <span word="usually">usually</span>. <span word="It">It</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="best">best</span> <span word="way">way</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="relax">relax</span>. <span word="This">This</span> <span word="ways">ways</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="help">help</span> <span word="us">us</span> <span word="take">take</span> <span word="mind">mind</span> <span word="off">off</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="job">job</span>. <span word="I">I</span> <span word="believe">believe</span> <span word="we">we</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="gain">gain</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="achievement">achievement</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="future">future</span>.</p><p> 作文批改如下：</p><p> <span word="With">With</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="development">development</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="society">society</span>, <span word="there">there</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="increasingly">increasingly</span> <span word="individuals">individuals</span> <span word="who">who</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="got">got</span> <span word="psychical">psychical</span> <span word="disease">disease</span>. <span word="Furthermore">Furthermore</span>, <span word="they">they</span> <span word="also">also</span> <span word="dont">dont</span> <span word="know">know</span> <span word="psychical">psychical</span> <span word="disease">disease</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="lead">lead</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="disease">disease</span>.</p><p> <span word="There">There</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="some">some</span> <span word="reason">reason</span>(加<span word="s">s</span>) <span word="for">for</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="phenomenon">phenomenon</span>. <span word="Firstly">Firstly</span>, <span word="people">people</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="pressure">pressure</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="heavy">heavy</span> <span word="work">work</span>, <span word="even">even</span> <span word="some">some</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="lose">lose</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="job">job</span> <span word="society">society</span>. <span word="Secondly">Secondly</span>, <span word="they">they</span> <span word="lack">lack</span> <span word="of">of</span> (删除)<span word="communication">communication</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="others">others</span>, <span word="and">and</span> <span word="close">close</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="thought">thought</span>. <span word="Because">Because</span> <span word="of">of</span> (删除，因为<span word="because">because</span> <span word="of">of</span> 后面不能加句子)<span word="they">they</span> <span word="stay">stay</span> <span word="online">online</span> <span word="when">when</span> <span word="finish">finish</span> <span word="work">work</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="so">so</span> <span word="on">on</span>(删除，另外，不能理解你本句要表达的意思与上一句有何关系). <span word="They">They</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="pay">pay</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="attention">attention</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="situation">situation</span>.</p>
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