SAT作文批改实例讲解(五)
<p> <span word="Style">Style</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="important">important</span> <span word="than">than</span> <span word="substance">substance</span>?</p><p> <span word="Think">Think</span> <span word="carefully">carefully</span> <span word="about">about</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="issue">issue</span> <span word="presented">presented</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="following">following</span> <span word="excerpt">excerpt</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="assignment">assignment</span> <span word="below">below</span>:</p><p> <span word="When">When</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="form">form</span> <span word="opinions">opinions</span> <span word="about">about</span> <span word="someone">someone</span> <span word="or">or</span> <span word="something">something</span>, <span word="what">what</span> <span word="affects">affects</span> <span word="them">them</span> <span word="most">most</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="substance">substance</span> <span word="but">but</span> <span word="style">style</span>. <span word="In">In</span> <span word="other">other</span> <span word="words">words</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="way">way</span> <span word="something">something</span> <span word="appears">appears</span> <span word="or">or</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="presented">presented</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="important">important</span> <span word="than">than</span> <span word="what">what</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="actually">actually</span> <span word="is">is</span>. <span word="This">This</span> <span word="principle">principle</span> <span word="affects">affects</span> <span word="how">how</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="look">look</span> <span word="at">at</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="leaders">leaders</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="lives">lives</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="books">books</span> <span word="they">they</span> <span word="read">read</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="products">products</span> <span word="they">they</span> <span word="buy">buy</span>, <span word="and">and</span> <span word="even">even</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="subjects">subjects</span> <span word="they">they</span> <span word="take">take</span> <span word="at">at</span> <span word="school">school</span>.</p><p> <span word="Assignment">Assignment</span>: <span word="Is">Is</span> <span word="style">style</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="important">important</span> <span word="than">than</span> <span word="substance">substance</span>? <span word="Plan">Plan</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="write">write</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="essay">essay</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="which">which</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="develop">develop</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="point">point</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="view">view</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="issue">issue</span>. <span word="Support">Support</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="position">position</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="reasoning">reasoning</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="examples">examples</span> <span word="taken">taken</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="reading">reading</span>, <span word="studies">studies</span>, <span word="experience">experience</span>, <span word="or">or</span> <span word="observations">observations</span>.</p><p> 习作修改</p><p> 学生习作</p><p> 语言修改</p><p> <span word="Style">Style</span>, <span word="of">of</span> <span word="course">course</span>, <span word="is">is</span> <span word="less">less</span> <span word="important">important</span> <span word="than">than</span> <span word="substance">substance</span>. <span word="If">If</span> <span word="there">there</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="rotten">rotten</span> <span word="apple">apple</span> <span word="placed">placed</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="crystal">crystal</span> <span word="bowl">bowl</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="front">front</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="you">you</span>, <span word="will">will</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="eat">eat</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="happily">happily</span> <span word="only">only</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="better">better</span> <span word="style">style</span>?</p><p> <span word="Style">Style</span>, <span word="of">of</span> <span word="course">course</span>, <span word="is">is</span> <span word="less">less</span> <span word="important">important</span> <span word="than">than</span> <span word="substance">substance</span>. <span word="If">If</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="rotten">rotten</span> <span word="apple">apple</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="placed">placed</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="crystal">crystal</span> <span word="bowl">bowl</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="happily">happily</span> <span word="eat">eat</span> <span word="it">it</span>?</p><p> 本段评点</p><p> 本文的开头比较有特色，第一句话开门见山直接给出自己的观点，而且观点明确。第二句话用了一个比喻加反问，而且这个比喻十分恰当地说明了形式与内容的关系，很是引人入胜，吸引阅卷人的注意力。</p>
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