SAT作文技巧分享:语言篇
<p> 最后一点关于语言，这是个很大的话题，今天只谈谈里面的一个小方面，就是中国同学受中式思维的影响比较久，在写英文句子的时候也显的有些散，短句太多，有些句子貌似很长但细细看发现还是<span word="and">and</span>连接的两个短句，显得不是很紧凑。比如下面这个句子：</p><p> <span word="Conscience">Conscience</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="illustrate">illustrate</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="right">right</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="wrong">wrong</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="developing">developing</span> <span word="society">society</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="truly">truly</span> <span word="value">value</span> <span word="we">we</span> <span word="exist">exist</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="world">world</span>. <span word="Money">Money</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="power">power</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="just">just</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="achievement">achievement</span>.</p><p> 首先句子想表达是良心很重要，因为给了我们是非观，同时让我们明白我们生存的意义，但是句子语法错误还是有的。第二句话的跳跃太快，突然变成钱和力量只是我们的成就，让读者觉得很困惑。</p><p> 我做了如下的修改 ：</p><p> <span word="To">To</span> <span word="me">me</span>, <span word="conscience">conscience</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="stronger">stronger</span> <span word="motivator">motivator</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="comparison">comparison</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="money">money</span>, <span word="power">power</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="fame">fame</span>, <span word="for">for</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="only">only</span> <span word="shows">shows</span> <span word="us">us</span> <span word="what">what</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="right">right</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="wrong">wrong</span> <span word="but">but</span> <span word="also">also</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="value">value</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="existence">existence</span>, <span word="namely">namely</span>, <span word="what">what</span> <span word="we">we</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="contribute">contribute</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="society">society</span>. 我进一步细化了概念，为后面写例子做铺垫。其中第二点说生存的价值即对社会的贡献，可以谈到很多人，比如<span word="Andrew">Andrew</span> <span word="Carnegie">Carnegie</span> 和<span word="Bill">Bill</span> <span word="Gates">Gates</span>，都是把万贯家财捐献给社会的人。</p><p> 以上从三个方面作了简单的点拨，不过作文绝对是一个长线工作，需要考生们大量的时间去练习和修改。不过作为赛达的同学要始终对自己充满足够信心，因为有勇气来挑战这个考试，本身就是一件很了不起的事了，你们都是很棒的学生，一定能通过自己的努力去获得自己想要的生活。</p>
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