SAT作文中间段修改实例讲解(二)
<p> <span word="SAT">SAT</span>作文中间段修改实例讲解</p><p> 三 <span word="When">When</span> <span word="we">we</span> <span word="came">came</span> <span word="back">back</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="Suzhou">Suzhou</span>, <span word="I">I</span> <span word="began">began</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="work">work</span> <span word="harder">harder</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="my">my</span> <span word="tennis">tennis</span> <span word="training">training</span>. <span word="Everyday">Everyday</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="went">went</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="tennis">tennis</span> <span word="court">court</span> <span word="after">after</span> <span word="school">school</span>. <span word="From">From</span> 5<span word="p">p</span>.<span word="m">m</span>. <span word="to">to</span> 8<span word="p">p</span>.<span word="m">m</span>., <span word="I">I</span> 1<span word="exert">exert</span> <span word="all">all</span> <span word="my">my</span> <span word="strength">strength</span> <span word="at">at</span> <span word="training">training</span>. <span word="Everyday">Everyday</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="was">was</span> <span word="still">still</span> <span word="training">training</span> 2<span word="while">while</span> <span word="my">my</span> <span word="teammates">teammates</span> <span word="went">went</span> <span word="home">home</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="parents">parents</span>.</p><p> 分析：</p><p> 1 时态的问题请大家一定要注重，确保前后一致。</p><p> 2 在看这句的时候，突然觉得作者有一点感伤了，看到同学们都和爸妈一起回去了。</p><p> 3 总体上说训练是一个把不好的记忆变成好记忆的重要过度，还得添加笔墨来加强场景感。</p><p> 修改：</p><p> <span word="After">After</span> <span word="returning">returning</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="my">my</span> <span word="hometown">hometown</span>, <span word="days">days</span> <span word="went">went</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="usual">usual</span>. <span word="But">But</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="failed">failed</span> <span word="experience">experience</span> <span word="let">let</span> <span word="me">me</span> <span word="realize">realize</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="tennis">tennis</span> <span word="player">player</span>, <span word="there">there</span> <span word="was">was</span> <span word="still">still</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="long">long</span> <span word="way">way</span> <span word="before">before</span> <span word="me">me</span>. <span word="In">In</span> <span word="order">order</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="fill">fill</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="gap">gap</span> <span word="between">between</span> <span word="professional">professional</span> <span word="athletes">athletes</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="me">me</span>, <span word="I">I</span> <span word="became">became</span> <span word="harder">harder</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="myself">myself</span>. <span word="Everyday">Everyday</span> <span word="after">after</span> <span word="school">school</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="could">could</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="spotted">spotted</span> <span word="walking">walking</span> <span word="into">into</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="stadium">stadium</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="training">training</span> <span word="painstakingly">painstakingly</span> <span word="every">every</span> <span word="night">night</span> <span word="until">until</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="security">security</span> <span word="guard">guard</span> <span word="hurried">hurried</span> <span word="me">me</span> <span word="up">up</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="leave">leave</span> <span word="there">there</span>. <span word="Day">Day</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="day">day</span> <span word="out">out</span>, <span word="I">I</span> <span word="kept">kept</span> <span word="practicing">practicing</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="series">series</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="skills">skills</span>---<span word="serving">serving</span>, <span word="forehand">forehand</span> <span word="hitting">hitting</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="backhand">backhand</span> <span word="returning">returning</span>, <span word="dampening">dampening</span> <span word="one">one</span> <span word="T">T</span>-<span word="shirt">shirt</span> <span word="after">after</span> <span word="another">another</span>. <span word="But">But</span> <span word="no">no</span> <span word="matter">matter</span> <span word="how">how</span> <span word="tired">tired</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="was">was</span>, <span word="I">I</span> <span word="always">always</span> <span word="bore">bore</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="mind">mind</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="idea">idea</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="beat">beat</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="man">man</span> <span word="who">who</span> <span word="looked">looked</span> <span word="upon">upon</span> <span word="me">me</span> <span word="one">one</span> <span word="year">year</span> <span word="ago">ago</span>. <span word="For">For</span> <span word="almost">almost</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="year">year</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="total">total</span> <span word="practice">practice</span> <span word="hours">hours</span> <span word="mounted">mounted</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="amazing">amazing</span> __ <span word="hours">hours</span>.</p>
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