SAT作文实例讲评
<p> 这篇作文和前一次讲的比较来看，这位同学有进步，开始在规定的时间内完成了文章，并进行了修改。美中不足的是，文章的结构还是比较古板，一，二，三然后结论。当然，转接，过渡和呼应都需要慢慢磨练。上课这几次短短的讲评，有这样的进步，我已经比较满意了。</p><p> 题目稍微难了一些：(<span word="While">While</span> <span word="Malaria">Malaria</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="tormenting">tormenting</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="Afican">Afican</span> <span word="continent">continent</span>, <span word="major">major</span> <span word="pharm">pharm</span> <span word="comapnies">comapnies</span> <span word="push">push</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="experiment">experiment</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="market">market</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="untested">untested</span> <span word="medicines">medicines</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="vaccines">vaccines</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="African">African</span> <span word="nations">nations</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="afford">afford</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="even">even</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="cheapest">cheapest</span> <span word="branded">branded</span> <span word="supplies">supplies</span> <span word="available">available</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="international">international</span> <span word="pharmaceutical">pharmaceutical</span> <span word="market">market</span>. <span word="Talk">Talk</span> <span word="about">about</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="dillemma">dillemma</span>, <span word="moral">moral</span> <span word="challenge">challenge</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="even">even</span> <span word="economic">economic</span> <span word="impact">impact</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="engagement">engagement</span>. <span word="Limit">Limit</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="discussion">discussion</span> <span word="to">to</span> 500 <span word="words">words</span> <span word="or">or</span> <span word="less">less</span>. )谈谈疟疾在非洲的问题，医药公司选择在非洲实验新药，而备受病情折磨的非洲无力支付成熟药物。这件事你怎么看，谈论你的观点。</p><p> <span word="Recently">Recently</span> <span word="reported">reported</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="journal">journal</span> <span word="Lancet">Lancet</span>, <span word="researchers">researchers</span> <span word="working">working</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="Cameroon">Cameroon</span> <span word="claimed">claimed</span> <span word="a">a</span> 100 <span word="percent">percent</span> <span word="cure">cure</span> <span word="rate">rate</span> <span word="among">among</span> 40 <span word="patients">patients</span> <span word="who">who</span> <span word="took">took</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="experimental">experimental</span> <span word="drug">drug</span>, <span word="Pyronaridine">Pyronaridine</span>. <span word="The">The</span> <span word="patients">patients</span> <span word="all">all</span> <span word="had">had</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="most">most</span> <span word="severe">severe</span> <span word="form">form</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="malaria">malaria</span>. <span word="By">By</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="contrast">contrast</span>, <span word="patients">patients</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="study">study</span> <span word="who">who</span> <span word="took">took</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="most">most</span> <span word="widely">widely</span> <span word="prescribed">prescribed</span> <span word="drug">drug</span>, <span word="Chloroquine">Chloroquine</span>, <span word="only">only</span> <span word="had">had</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="cure">cure</span> <span word="rate">rate</span> <span word="of">of</span> 44 <span word="percent">percent</span>. <span word="So">So</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="report">report</span> <span word="convince">convince</span> <span word="me">me</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="benefits">benefits</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="medicine">medicine</span> <span word="tests">tests</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="Africa">Africa</span> <span word="outweigh">outweigh</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="drawbacks">drawbacks</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="following">following</span> <span word="reasons">reasons</span>.</p>
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