一篇SAT作文批改实例讲解
<p> 下面是一篇<span word="SAT">SAT</span>作文，我们来看一下专业的老师对于这篇文章的批改，好的地方大家可以吸取其精华，剔除其糟粕，要时刻记住，逻辑和表达是一篇优秀文章的核心。</p><p> <span word="Topic">Topic</span>: <span word="Is">Is</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="way">way</span> <span word="something">something</span> <span word="seems">seems</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="always">always</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="same">same</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="actually">actually</span> <span word="is">is</span>?</p><p> <span word="Original">Original</span></p><p> <span word="Beneath">Beneath</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="surface">surface</span> <span word="usually">usually</span> <span word="lies">lies</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="truth">truth</span> <span word="which">which</span> <span word="may">may</span> <span word="turns">turns</span> <span word="out">out</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="unexpected">unexpected</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="subversive">subversive</span>. <span word="To">To</span> <span word="those">those</span> <span word="who">who</span> <span word="only">only</span> <span word="see">see</span> <span word="one">one</span> <span word="facet">facet</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="event">event</span>, <span word="things">things</span> <span word="invariably">invariably</span> <span word="seem">seem</span> <span word="simple">simple</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="single">single</span>-<span word="sided">sided</span>. <span word="But">But</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="those">those</span> <span word="who">who</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="perceivable">perceivable</span> <span word="enough">enough</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="explore">explore</span> <span word="things">things</span> <span word="underneath">underneath</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="surface">surface</span>, <span word="there">there</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="always">always</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="however">however</span>.</p><p> <span word="One">One</span> <span word="prime">prime</span> <span word="example">example</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="America">America</span> <span word="Stock">Stock</span> <span word="Market">Market</span> <span word="Crash">Crash</span> <span word="in">in</span> 1929. <span word="In">In</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="dazzling">dazzling</span> <span word="twentieth">twentieth</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="American">American</span> <span word="bull">bull</span> <span word="market">market</span> <span word="was">was</span> <span word="so">so</span> <span word="financially">financially</span> <span word="inviting">inviting</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="even">even</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="American">American</span> <span word="middle">middle</span> <span word="class">class</span> <span word="poured">poured</span> <span word="its">its</span> <span word="money">money</span> <span word="into">into</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="stock">stock</span> <span word="market">market</span>, <span word="like">like</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="New">New</span> <span word="York">York</span> <span word="Stock">Stock</span> <span word="Exchange">Exchange</span>. <span word="However">However</span>, <span word="on">on</span> <span word="October">October</span> 4, 1929, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="American">American</span> <span word="economy">economy</span> <span word="came">came</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="abrupt">abrupt</span> <span word="halt">halt</span> <span word="when">when</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="New">New</span> <span word="York">York</span> <span word="Stock">Stock</span> <span word="Exchange">Exchange</span> <span word="crashed">crashed</span>. <span word="The">The</span> <span word="previous">previous</span> <span word="widespread">widespread</span> <span word="optimism">optimism</span> <span word="then">then</span> <span word="shifted">shifted</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="desperate">desperate</span> <span word="pessimism">pessimism</span> <span word="shading">shading</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="whole">whole</span> <span word="nation">nation</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="nightmare">nightmare</span>. <span word="Consequently">Consequently</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="Great">Great</span> <span word="Depression">Depression</span> <span word="befell">befell</span>, <span word="leaving">leaving</span> <span word="American">American</span> <span word="economy">economy</span> <span word="crippling">crippling</span>.</p><p> <span word="However">However</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="American">American</span> <span word="president">president</span> <span word="Roosevelt">Roosevelt</span> <span word="insightfully">insightfully</span> <span word="staged">staged</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="series">series</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="measures">measures</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="save">save</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="falling">falling</span> <span word="economy">economy</span>. <span word="Just">Just</span> <span word="like">like</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="beam">beam</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="sunlight">sunlight</span> <span word="expels">expels</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="black">black</span> <span word="cloud">cloud</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="sky">sky</span>, <span word="Roosevelt">Roosevelt</span> <span word="brought">brought</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="beam">beam</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="hope">hope</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="American">American</span> <span word="people">people</span>, <span word="saving">saving</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="whole">whole</span> <span word="nation">nation</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="suicidal">suicidal</span> <span word="pessimism">pessimism</span>. <span word="Some">Some</span> <span word="may">may</span> <span word="deem">deem</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="Great">Great</span> <span word="Depression">Depression</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="outright">outright</span> <span word="catastrophe">catastrophe</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="America">America</span>. <span word="Yet">Yet</span> <span word="beneath">beneath</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="bad">bad</span> <span word="impacts">impacts</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="heaved">heaved</span> <span word="upon">upon</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="country">country</span>, <span word="we">we</span> <span word="may">may</span> <span word="find">find</span> <span word="many">many</span> <span word="benefits">benefits</span> <span word="resulted">resulted</span>. <span word="It">It</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="after">after</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="Great">Great</span> <span word="Depression">Depression</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="American">American</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="began">began</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="hold">hold</span> <span word="dear">dear</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="value">value</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="prudence">prudence</span> <span word="when">when</span> <span word="investing">investing</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="stock">stock</span> <span word="market">market</span>. <span word="They">They</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="likely">likely</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="avoid">avoid</span> <span word="being">being</span> <span word="overwhelmed">overwhelmed</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="seemingly">seemingly</span> <span word="sweeping">sweeping</span> <span word="optimism">optimism</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="current">current</span> <span word="financial">financial</span> <span word="situations">situations</span>. <span word="The">The</span> <span word="prophets">prophets</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="economy">economy</span>, <span word="formerly">formerly</span> <span word="imprudent">imprudent</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="arbitrary">arbitrary</span>, <span word="are">are</span> <span word="learning">learning</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="careful">careful</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="perspicacious">perspicacious</span> <span word="when">when</span> <span word="making">making</span> <span word="predictions">predictions</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="public">public</span>. <span word="Thus">Thus</span>, <span word="from">from</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="disaster">disaster</span>, <span word="American">American</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="benefit">benefit</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="financial">financial</span> <span word="fiasco">fiasco</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="forged">forged</span> <span word="some">some</span> <span word="new">new</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="beneficial">beneficial</span> <span word="habits">habits</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="they">they</span> <span word="previously">previously</span> <span word="lacked">lacked</span>.</p>
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