6类SAT写作常见问题之三 表达受中文影响
<p> 在学生平时的<span word="SAT">SAT</span>写作练习中，留学的老师们通过长期的观察与总结，发现了6类常见的问题，这是导致学生在考试中丢分的原因。英语和汉语表达有区别，如果在英语写作中套汉语思维，就是中式化英语的表现，这只能使文章语言蹩脚、冗赘。今天我们就来看<span word="SAT">SAT</span>写作6类常见问题之三：表达受中文影响。</p><p> 1、<span word="Original">Original</span>: <span word="If">If</span> <span word="we">we</span> <span word="agree">agree</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="say">say</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="school">school</span> <span word="offers">offers</span> <span word="us">us</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="best">best</span> <span word="book">book</span> <span word="knowledge">knowledge</span> <span word="acquisition">acquisition</span> <span word="then">then</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="society">society</span> <span word="offers">offers</span> <span word="us">us</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="best">best</span> <span word="surviving">surviving</span> <span word="techniques">techniques</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="hard">hard</span> <span word="way">way</span></p><p> <span word="Revised">Revised</span>: <span word="If">If</span> <span word="we">we</span> <span word="agree">agree</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="school">school</span> <span word="offers">offers</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="best">best</span> <span word="method">method</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="acquisition">acquisition</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="book">book</span> <span word="knowledge">knowledge</span>, <span word="then">then</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="society">society</span> <span word="offers">offers</span> <span word="us">us</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="best">best</span> <span word="method">method</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="acquiring">acquiring</span> <span word="common">common</span> <span word="sense">sense</span> <span word="or">or</span> <span word="street">street</span> <span word="smarts">smarts</span>.</p><p> <span word="Agree">Agree</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="say">say</span> <span word="that">that</span>表达中式化，只需要<span word="agree">agree</span> <span word="that">that</span>即可;<span word="the">the</span> <span word="best">best</span> <span word="book">book</span> <span word="knowledge">knowledge</span> <span word="acquisition">acquisition</span>改为<span word="the">the</span> <span word="best">best</span> <span word="method">method</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="acquisition">acquisition</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="book">book</span> <span word="knowledge">knowledge</span>更为恰当，同样，后面的<span word="the">the</span> <span word="best">best</span> <span word="surviving">surviving</span> <span word="techniques">techniques</span>改为<span word="the">the</span> <span word="best">best</span> <span word="method">method</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="acquiring">acquiring</span> <span word="common">common</span> <span word="sense">sense</span>...;加上<span word="street">street</span> <span word="marks">marks</span>给文章的词汇增添色彩。</p><p> 2、<span word="Original">Original</span>: <span word="They">They</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="spend">spend</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="time">time</span> <span word="studying">studying</span> <span word="education">education</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="communication">communication</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="improve">improve</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="role">role</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="mother">mother</span>, <span word="wifes">wifes</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="daughter">daughter</span>.</p><p> <span word="Revised">Revised</span>: <span word="They">They</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="also">also</span> <span word="decide">decide</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="spend">spend</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="time">time</span> <span word="studying">studying</span>, <span word="education">education</span> <span word="themselves">themselves</span>, <span word="in">in</span> <span word="order">order</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="improve">improve</span> <span word="themselves">themselves</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="roles">roles</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="mothers">mothers</span>, <span word="wives">wives</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="daughters">daughters</span></p><p> 原句中<span word="studying">studying</span> <span word="education">education</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="communication">communication</span>的说法中式化，不符合英语的表述，应该为<span word="studying">studying</span>，<span word="educating">educating</span> <span word="themselves">themselves</span>。除了词语表达，此句中还存在其他问题，如名词单复数的使用：不是提高他们的角色，而是提高他们自身以扮演好母亲角色。还有，女性不止一个人。很多人都在扮演母亲角色，<span word="role">role</span>和<span word="mother">mother</span>应用复数，故将<span word="improve">improve</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="role">role</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="mother">mother</span>改为<span word="improve">improve</span> <span word="themselves">themselves</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="roles">roles</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="mother">mother</span>;同样，为保持一致，<span word="wife">wife</span>和<span word="daughter">daughter</span>也可用复数，原文中<span word="wife">wife</span>的复数写法有误，应该是<span word="wives">wives</span>。</p>
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