SAT作文写作不可牺牲句子的可读性
<p> 在<span word="SAT">SAT</span>作文写作中一味地追求句子的长度有时反而会牺牲句子的可读性，特别是对一些基础一般的学生在写<span word="SAT">SAT</span>作文时，有时生硬地追求长句，使用空洞的单词和词组反而破坏了句子的句法准确性。下面我们就来看一些例子，体会一些写得并不成功的长句和如何修改的建议：</p><p> 1. 一些空洞的单词或词组更本不能为句子带来任何相关的或重要的信息，完全可以被删掉。比如下面的句子：</p><p> <span word="When">When</span> <span word="all">all</span> <span word="things">things</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="considered">considered</span>， <span word="young">young</span> <span word="adults">adults</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="today">today</span> <span word="live">live</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="satisfying">satisfying</span> <span word="lives">lives</span> <span word="than">than</span> <span word="those">those</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="parents">parents</span>，<span word="in">in</span> <span word="my">my</span> <span word="opinion">opinion</span>.</p><p> 这句话当中的<span word="when">when</span> <span word="all">all</span> <span word="things">things</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="considered">considered</span>和<span word="in">in</span> <span word="my">my</span> <span word="opinion">opinion</span>都显得多余。完全可以去掉。改为：<span word="Young">Young</span> <span word="adults">adults</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="today">today</span> <span word="live">live</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="satisfying">satisfying</span> <span word="lives">lives</span> <span word="than">than</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="parents">parents</span>.</p><p> <span word="due">due</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="fact">fact</span> <span word="that">that</span>就是一个很典型的繁琐的表达方式的例子，可以替换，简化为下面的表达方式：</p><p> 2. 有些空洞和繁琐的表达方式可以进行替换，例如：</p><p> <span word="Due">Due</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="fact">fact</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="grandparents">grandparents</span> <span word="were">were</span> <span word="under">under</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="obligation">obligation</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="help">help</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="parents">parents</span>， <span word="they">they</span> <span word="did">did</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="options">options</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="young">young</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="at">at</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="point">point</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="time">time</span>.</p><p> <span word="due">due</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="fact">fact</span> <span word="that">that</span>就是一个很典型的繁琐的表达方式的例子，可以替换，简化为下面的表达方式：</p><p> <span word="Because">Because</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="grandparents">grandparents</span> <span word="were">were</span> <span word="obligated">obligated</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="help">help</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="parents">parents</span>，<span word="they">they</span> <span word="did">did</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="options">options</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="young">young</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="now">now</span>.</p>
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