SAT写作学生原作与老师修改文章示例
<p> 下面是一位同学在练习<span word="SAT">SAT</span>写作时的一篇文章，第二页是老师对其进行的修改，用粗体标出，大家可以对照他的原文和修改后的文章，看看自己是不是也会犯这样的错误，引以为鉴。</p><p> 学生原文：</p><p> <span word="Assignment">Assignment</span>: <span word="Is">Is</span> <span word="talking">talking</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="most">most</span> <span word="effective">effective</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="satisfying">satisfying</span> <span word="way">way</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="communicating">communicating</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="others">others</span>?</p><p> <span word="Talking">Talking</span>, <span word="which">which</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="most">most</span> <span word="used">used</span> <span word="communication">communication</span> <span word="device">device</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="life">life</span>, <span word="seems">seems</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="genuine">genuine</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="personal">personal</span>. <span word="However">However</span>, <span word="talking">talking</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="also">also</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="device">device</span> <span word="full">full</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="rhetoric">rhetoric</span>, <span word="which">which</span> <span word="makes">makes</span> <span word="things">things</span> <span word="complicated">complicated</span>. <span word="On">On</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="other">other</span> <span word="hand">hand</span>, <span word="some">some</span> <span word="other">other</span> <span word="communications">communications</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="much">much</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="effective">effective</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="satisfying">satisfying</span> <span word="than">than</span> <span word="what">what</span> <span word="we">we</span> <span word="perceive">perceive</span>.</p><p> <span word="Singing">Singing</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="sometimes">sometimes</span> <span word="referred">referred</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="poems">poems</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="voices">voices</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="rhythm">rhythm</span>, <span word="and">and</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="helps">helps</span> <span word="us">us</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="give">give</span> <span word="out">out</span> <span word="all">all</span> <span word="kinds">kinds</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="emotion">emotion</span> <span word="through">through</span> <span word="every">every</span> <span word="single">single</span> <span word="patch">patch</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="voice">voice</span>, <span word="accentuation">accentuation</span>, <span word="and">and</span> <span word="things">things</span> <span word="like">like</span> <span word="that">that</span>. <span word="Take">Take</span> <span word="Susan">Susan</span> <span word="Boyle">Boyle</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="example">example</span>. <span word="She">She</span> <span word="was">was</span> <span word="diagnosed">diagnosed</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="difficulty">difficulty</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="learning">learning</span> <span word="when">when</span> <span word="she">she</span> <span word="was">was</span> <span word="born">born</span>. <span word="And">And</span> <span word="her">her</span> <span word="studying">studying</span> <span word="life">life</span> <span word="did">did</span> <span word="bring">bring</span> <span word="her">her</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="lot">lot</span> <span word="chiding">chiding</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="mocking">mocking</span>, <span word="and">and</span> <span word="so">so</span> <span word="she">she</span> <span word="was">was</span> <span word="called">called</span> <span word="Simple">Simple</span> <span word="Sussy">Sussy</span>. <span word="And">And</span> <span word="shes">shes</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="good">good</span> <span word="at">at</span> <span word="talking">talking</span> <span word="appropriately">appropriately</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="formally">formally</span>; <span word="as">as</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="result">result</span>, <span word="she">she</span> <span word="tool">tool</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="job">job</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="kitchen">kitchen</span> <span word="after">after</span> <span word="graduation">graduation</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="high">high</span> <span word="school">school</span>. <span word="However">However</span>, <span word="she">she</span> <span word="always">always</span> <span word="nudged">nudged</span> <span word="others">others</span> <span word="disapproval">disapproval</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="her">her</span> <span word="away">away</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="keeps">keeps</span> <span word="chasing">chasing</span> <span word="her">her</span> <span word="dream">dream</span>- <span word="to">to</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="singer">singer</span>. <span word="The">The</span> <span word="moment">moment</span> <span word="she">she</span> <span word="stood">stood</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="stage">stage</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="Britains">Britains</span> <span word="Got">Got</span> <span word="Talent">Talent</span>, <span word="no">no</span> <span word="one">one</span> <span word="thought">thought</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="old">old</span> <span word="Scottish">Scottish</span> <span word="granny">granny</span> <span word="could">could</span> <span word="shock">shock</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="world">world</span>, <span word="but">but</span> <span word="Susans">Susans</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="Dreamed">Dreamed</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="Dream">Dream</span> <span word="even">even</span> <span word="moved">moved</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="tip">tip</span>-<span word="ticking">ticking</span> <span word="judge">judge</span> <span word="Simon">Simon</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="become">become</span> <span word="another">another</span> <span word="American">American</span> <span word="Dream">Dream</span>. <span word="If">If</span> <span word="Susan">Susan</span> <span word="had">had</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="kept">kept</span> <span word="polishing">polishing</span> <span word="her">her</span> <span word="singing">singing</span> <span word="skills">skills</span>, <span word="she">she</span> <span word="would">would</span> <span word="live">live</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="boring">boring</span> <span word="life">life</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="country">country</span>, <span word="with">with</span> <span word="poor">poor</span> <span word="talking">talking</span> <span word="talents">talents</span>.</p>
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