SAT作文实例讲评
<p> 这篇作文和前一次讲的比较来看，这位同学有进步，开始在规定的时间内完成了文章，并进行了修改。美中不足的是，文章的结构还是比较古板，一，二，三然后结论。当然，转接，过渡和呼应都需要慢慢磨练。上课这几次短短的讲评，有这样的进步，我已经比较满意了。</p><p> 题目稍微难了一些：谈谈疟疾在非洲的问题，医药公司选择在非洲实验新药，而备受病情折磨的非洲无力支付成熟药物。这件事你怎么看，谈论你的观点。</p><p> <span word="Recently">Recently</span> <span word="reported">reported</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="journal">journal</span> <span word="Lancet">Lancet</span>, <span word="researchers">researchers</span> <span word="working">working</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="Cameroon">Cameroon</span> <span word="claimed">claimed</span> <span word="a">a</span> 100 <span word="percent">percent</span> <span word="cure">cure</span> <span word="rate">rate</span> <span word="among">among</span> 40 <span word="patients">patients</span> <span word="who">who</span> <span word="took">took</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="experimental">experimental</span> <span word="drug">drug</span>, <span word="Pyronaridine">Pyronaridine</span>. <span word="The">The</span> <span word="patients">patients</span> <span word="all">all</span> <span word="had">had</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="most">most</span> <span word="severe">severe</span> <span word="form">form</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="malaria">malaria</span>. <span word="By">By</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="contrast">contrast</span>, <span word="patients">patients</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="study">study</span> <span word="who">who</span> <span word="took">took</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="most">most</span> <span word="widely">widely</span> <span word="prescribed">prescribed</span> <span word="drug">drug</span>, <span word="Chloroquine">Chloroquine</span>, <span word="only">only</span> <span word="had">had</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="cure">cure</span> <span word="rate">rate</span> <span word="of">of</span> 44 <span word="percent">percent</span>. <span word="So">So</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="report">report</span> <span word="convince">convince</span> <span word="me">me</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="benefits">benefits</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="medicine">medicine</span> <span word="tests">tests</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="Africa">Africa</span> <span word="outweigh">outweigh</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="drawbacks">drawbacks</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="following">following</span> <span word="reasons">reasons</span>.</p><p> <span word="First">First</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="all">all</span>, <span word="some">some</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="regard">regard</span> <span word="testing">testing</span> <span word="new">new</span> <span word="drugs">drugs</span> <span word="widely">widely</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="Africa">Africa</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="immoral">immoral</span> <span word="behavior">behavior</span>. <span word="However">However</span>, <span word="I">I</span> <span word="strongly">strongly</span> <span word="disagree">disagree</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="opinion">opinion</span>, <span word="since">since</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="same">same</span> <span word="tests">tests</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="done">done</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="North">North</span> <span word="America">America</span>, <span word="South">South</span> <span word="America">America</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="Europe">Europe</span>. <span word="To">To</span> <span word="clarify">clarify</span> <span word="my">my</span> <span word="point">point</span>, <span word="on">on</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="one">one</span> <span word="hand">hand</span>, <span word="we">we</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="single">single</span> <span word="out">out</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="tests">tests</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="Africa">Africa</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="criticism">criticism</span>. <span word="Testing">Testing</span> <span word="medicines">medicines</span> <span word="there">there</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="problem">problem</span> <span word="being">being</span> <span word="relevant">relevant</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="moral">moral</span>, <span word="but">but</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="behavior">behavior</span> <span word="leading">leading</span> <span word="us">us</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="find">find</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="better">better</span> <span word="appoach">appoach</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="save">save</span> <span word="lives">lives</span>. <span word="On">On</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="other">other</span> <span word="hand">hand</span>, <span word="in">in</span> <span word="Africa">Africa</span>, <span word="if">if</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="drug">drug</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="sold">sold</span> <span word="without">without</span> <span word="sufficient">sufficient</span> <span word="testing">testing</span>, <span word="certain">certain</span> <span word="severe">severe</span> <span word="effects">effects</span> <span word="may">may</span> <span word="become">become</span> <span word="unable">unable</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="detect">detect</span>, <span word="rendering">rendering</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="into">into</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="high">high</span> <span word="rates">rates</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="disease">disease</span>, <span word="or">or</span>, <span word="even">even</span> <span word="death">death</span>.</p>
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