GMAT OG满分范文剖析及点评
<p> <span word="gmat">gmat</span>写作范文良莠不齐，并非篇篇能称之为范，毕竟它们不是<span word="ACT">ACT</span>/<span word="ETS">ETS</span>所钦定的文章。如此说来，<span word="Official">Official</span> <span word="Guide">Guide</span>上的范文就弥足珍贵，无论6分的还是5分、4分的都要仔细分析，尤其是其中所给与的分析和评论更是要细细体味，领悟其精神，然后用心实践。</p><p> 下面是一篇官方给出满分的<span word="ARGUMENT">ARGUMENT</span>范文，我们来一起赏析，看看它为何能<span word="scored">scored</span> <span word="six">six</span> </p><p> <span word="The">The</span> <span word="following">following</span> <span word="appeared">appeared</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="part">part</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="article">article</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="daily">daily</span> <span word="newspaper">newspaper</span>:</p><p> <span word="Most">Most</span> <span word="companies">companies</span> <span word="would">would</span> <span word="agree">agree</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="risk">risk</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="physical">physical</span> <span word="injury">injury</span> <span word="occurring">occurring</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="job">job</span> <span word="increases">increases</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="wages">wages</span> <span word="paid">paid</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="employees">employees</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="also">also</span> <span word="increase">increase</span>. <span word="Hence">Hence</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="makes">makes</span> <span word="financial">financial</span> <span word="sense">sense</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="employers">employers</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="make">make</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="workplace">workplace</span> <span word="safer">safer</span>: <span word="they">they</span> <span word="could">could</span> <span word="thus">thus</span> <span word="reduce">reduce</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="payroll">payroll</span> <span word="expenses">expenses</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="save">save</span> <span word="money">money</span>.</p><p> <span word="Discuss">Discuss</span> <span word="how">how</span> <span word="well">well</span> <span word="reasoned">reasoned</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="find">find</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="argument">argument</span>. <span word="In">In</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="discussion">discussion</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="sure">sure</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="analyze">analyze</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="line">line</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="reasoning">reasoning</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="use">use</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="evidence">evidence</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="argument">argument</span>. <span word="For">For</span> <span word="example">example</span>, <span word="you">you</span> <span word="may">may</span> <span word="need">need</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="consider">consider</span> <span word="what">what</span> <span word="questionable">questionable</span> <span word="assumptions">assumptions</span> <span word="underlie">underlie</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="thinking">thinking</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="what">what</span> <span word="alternative">alternative</span> <span word="explanations">explanations</span> <span word="or">or</span> <span word="counterexamples">counterexamples</span> <span word="might">might</span> <span word="weaken">weaken</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="conclusion">conclusion</span>. <span word="You">You</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="also">also</span> <span word="discuss">discuss</span> <span word="what">what</span> <span word="sort">sort</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="evidence">evidence</span> <span word="would">would</span> <span word="strengthen">strengthen</span> <span word="or">or</span> <span word="refute">refute</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="argument">argument</span>, <span word="what">what</span> <span word="changes">changes</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="argument">argument</span> <span word="would">would</span> <span word="make">make</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="logically">logically</span> <span word="sound">sound</span>, <span word="and">and</span> <span word="what">what</span>, <span word="if">if</span> <span word="anything">anything</span>, <span word="would">would</span> <span word="help">help</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="better">better</span> <span word="evaluate">evaluate</span> <span word="its">its</span> <span word="conclusion">conclusion</span>.</p><p> 首段</p><p> <span word="This">This</span> <span word="argument">argument</span> <span word="states">states</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="makes">makes</span> <span word="financial">financial</span> <span word="sense">sense</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="employers">employers</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="make">make</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="workplace">workplace</span> <span word="safer">safer</span> <span word="because">because</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="making">making</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="workplace">workplace</span> <span word="safer">safer</span> <span word="then">then</span> <span word="lower">lower</span> <span word="wages">wages</span> <span word="could">could</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="paid">paid</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="employees">employees</span>. <span word="This">This</span> <span word="conclusion">conclusion</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="based">based</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="premise">premise</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="list">list</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="physical">physical</span> <span word="injury">injury</span> <span word="increases">increases</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="wages">wages</span> <span word="paid">paid</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="employees">employees</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="also">also</span> <span word="increase">increase</span>. <span word="However">However</span>, <span word="there">there</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="several">several</span> <span word="assumptions">assumptions</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="may">may</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="necessarily">necessarily</span> <span word="apply">apply</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="argument">argument</span>. <span word="For">For</span> <span word="example">example</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="costs">costs</span> <span word="associated">associated</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="making">making</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="workplace">workplace</span> <span word="safe">safe</span> <span word="must">must</span> <span word="outweigh">outweigh</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="increased">increased</span> <span word="payroll">payroll</span> <span word="expenses">expenses</span> <span word="due">due</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="hazardous">hazardous</span> <span word="conditions">conditions</span>. <span word="Also">Also</span>, <span word="one">one</span> <span word="must">must</span> <span word="look">look</span> <span word="at">at</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="plausability">plausability</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="improving">improving</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="work">work</span> <span word="environment">environment</span>. <span word="And">And</span> <span word="finally">finally</span>, <span word="because">because</span> <span word="most">most</span> <span word="companies">companies</span> <span word="agree">agree</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="risk">risk</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="injury">injury</span> <span word="increases">increases</span> <span word="so">so</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="wages">wages</span> <span word="doesnt">doesnt</span> <span word="necessarily">necessarily</span> <span word="mean">mean</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="all">all</span> <span word="companies">companies</span> <span word="which">which</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="hazardous">hazardous</span> <span word="work">work</span> <span word="environments">environments</span> <span word="agree">agree</span>.</p>
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