GMAT写作辅导：109题Argument范文（二）
<p> 2. <span word="The">The</span> <span word="following">following</span> <span word="appeared">appeared</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="memorandum">memorandum</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="business">business</span> <span word="department">department</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="Apogee">Apogee</span> <span word="Company">Company</span>. <span word="When">When</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="Apogee">Apogee</span> <span word="Company">Company</span> <span word="had">had</span> <span word="all">all</span> <span word="its">its</span> <span word="operations">operations</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="one">one</span> <span word="location">location</span>, <span word="it">it</span> <span word="was">was</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="profitable">profitable</span> <span word="than">than</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="today">today</span>. <span word="Therefore">Therefore</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="Apogee">Apogee</span> <span word="Company">Company</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="close">close</span> <span word="down">down</span> <span word="its">its</span> <span word="field">field</span> <span word="offices">offices</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="conduct">conduct</span> <span word="all">all</span> <span word="its">its</span> <span word="operations">operations</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="single">single</span> <span word="location">location</span>. <span word="Such">Such</span> <span word="centralization">centralization</span> <span word="would">would</span> <span word="improve">improve</span> <span word="profitability">profitability</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="cutting">cutting</span> <span word="costs">costs</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="helping">helping</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="company">company</span> <span word="maintain">maintain</span> <span word="better">better</span> <span word="supervision">supervision</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="all">all</span> <span word="employees">employees</span>. <span word="Discuss">Discuss</span> <span word="how">how</span> <span word="well">well</span> <span word="reasoned">reasoned</span>... <span word="etc">etc</span>.</p><p> <span word="In">In</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="argument">argument</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="author">author</span> <span word="concludes">concludes</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="Apogee">Apogee</span> <span word="Company">Company</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="close">close</span> <span word="down">down</span> <span word="field">field</span> <span word="offices">offices</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="conduct">conduct</span> <span word="all">all</span> <span word="its">its</span> <span word="operations">operations</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="single">single</span>, <span word="centralized">centralized</span> <span word="location">location</span> <span word="because">because</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="company">company</span> <span word="had">had</span> <span word="been">been</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="profitable">profitable</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="past">past</span> <span word="when">when</span> <span word="all">all</span> <span word="its">its</span> <span word="operations">operations</span> <span word="were">were</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="one">one</span> <span word="location">location</span>. <span word="For">For</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="couple">couple</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="reasons">reasons</span>, <span word="this">this</span> <span word="argument">argument</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="very">very</span> <span word="convincing">convincing</span>.</p><p> <span word="First">First</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="author">author</span> <span word="assumes">assumes</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="centralization">centralization</span> <span word="would">would</span> <span word="improve">improve</span> <span word="profitability">profitability</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="cutting">cutting</span> <span word="costs">costs</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="streamlining">streamlining</span> <span word="supervision">supervision</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="employees">employees</span>. <span word="This">This</span> <span word="assumption">assumption</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="never">never</span> <span word="supported">supported</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="any">any</span> <span word="data">data</span> <span word="or">or</span> <span word="projections">projections</span>. <span word="Moreover">Moreover</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="assumption">assumption</span> <span word="fails">fails</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="take">take</span> <span word="into">into</span> <span word="account">account</span> <span word="cost">cost</span> <span word="increases">increases</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="inefficiency">inefficiency</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="could">could</span> <span word="result">result</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="centralization">centralization</span>. <span word="For">For</span> <span word="instance">instance</span>, <span word="company">company</span> <span word="representatives">representatives</span> <span word="would">would</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="travel">travel</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="do">do</span> <span word="business">business</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="areas">areas</span> <span word="formerly">formerly</span> <span word="served">served</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="field">field</span> <span word="office">office</span>, <span word="creating">creating</span> <span word="travel">travel</span> <span word="costs">costs</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="loss">loss</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="critical">critical</span> <span word="time">time</span>. <span word="In">In</span> <span word="short">short</span>, <span word="this">this</span> <span word="assumption">assumption</span> <span word="must">must</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="supported">supported</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="thorough">thorough</span> <span word="cost">cost</span>-<span word="benefit">benefit</span> <span word="analysis">analysis</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="centralization">centralization</span> <span word="versus">versus</span> <span word="other">other</span> <span word="possible">possible</span> <span word="cost">cost</span>-<span word="cutting">cutting</span> <span word="and">and</span>/<span word="or">or</span> <span word="profit">profit</span>-<span word="enhancing">enhancing</span> <span word="strategies">strategies</span>.</p>
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