GRE写作argument全部官方范文分析(3)
<p> 范文分析</p><p> 第一篇文章</p><p> <span word="Hospital">Hospital</span> <span word="statistics">statistics</span> <span word="regarding">regarding</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="who">who</span> <span word="go">go</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="emergency">emergency</span> <span word="room">room</span> <span word="after">after</span> <span word="rollerskating">rollerskating</span> <span word="accidents">accidents</span> <span word="indicate">indicate</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="need">need</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="protective">protective</span> <span word="equipment">equipment</span>. <span word="Within">Within</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="group">group</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="people">people</span>, 75 <span word="percent">percent</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="those">those</span> <span word="who">who</span> <span word="had">had</span> <span word="accidents">accidents</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="streets">streets</span> <span word="or">or</span> <span word="parking">parking</span> <span word="lots">lots</span> <span word="were">were</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="wearing">wearing</span> <span word="any">any</span> <span word="protective">protective</span> <span word="clothing">clothing</span> <span word="or">or</span> <span word="any">any</span> <span word="light">light</span>-<span word="reflecting">reflecting</span> <span word="material">material</span> . <span word="Clearly">Clearly</span>, <span word="these">these</span> <span word="statistics">statistics</span> <span word="indicate">indicate</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="investing">investing</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="high">high</span>-<span word="quality">quality</span> <span word="protective">protective</span> <span word="gear">gear</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="reflective">reflective</span> <span word="equipment">equipment</span>, <span word="rollerskaters">rollerskaters</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="greatly">greatly</span> <span word="reduce">reduce</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="risk">risk</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="being">being</span> <span word="severely">severely</span> <span word="injured">injured</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="accident">accident</span>.</p><p> 原题逻辑顺序为：数据显示了对保护装备的需求==〉展开说明这个数据是怎样显示这样的需求的==〉结论：为了达到这个效果我们应该重金买这保护设备。</p><p> <span word="Benchmark">Benchmark</span> 6</p><p> <span word="The">The</span> <span word="notion">notion</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="protective">protective</span> <span word="gear">gear</span> <span word="reduces">reduces</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="injuries">injuries</span> <span word="suffered">suffered</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="accidents">accidents</span> <span word="seems">seems</span> <span word="at">at</span> <span word="first">first</span> <span word="glance">glance</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="obvious">obvious</span> <span word="conclusion">conclusion</span>. <span word="After">After</span> <span word="all">all</span>, <span word="it">it</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="intent">intent</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="these">these</span> <span word="products">products</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="either">either</span> <span word="prevent">prevent</span> <span word="accidents">accidents</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="occuring">occuring</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="first">first</span> <span word="place">place</span> <span word="or">or</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="reduce">reduce</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="injuries">injuries</span> <span word="suffered">suffered</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="wearer">wearer</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="accident">accident</span> <span word="occur">occur</span>. 前两句首先肯定了原命题中值得肯定的地方。这是求同存异的表现。注意这里第一句作者同意原命题的同时，在第二句紧接着就给出了展开的证明。而没有光是罗列观点。<span word="However">However</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="conclusion">conclusion</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="investing">investing</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="high">high</span> <span word="quality">quality</span> <span word="protective">protective</span> <span word="gear">gear</span> <span word="greatly">greatly</span> <span word="reduces">reduces</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="risk">risk</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="being">being</span> <span word="severely">severely</span> <span word="injured">injured</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="accident">accident</span> <span word="may">may</span> <span word="mask">mask</span> <span word="other">other</span> <span word="causes">causes</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="injuries">injuries</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="may">may</span> <span word="inspire">inspire</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="over">over</span> <span word="invest">invest</span> <span word="financially">financially</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="psychologically">psychologically</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="protective">protective</span> <span word="gear">gear</span>. 再说原命题是存在逻辑漏洞的，即它因。这里并没有展开论证，因为这是全文的中心句，整个文章都在后面给予论证。同时，最后半句给出了论据中的潜在后果。</p>
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