优秀作文精析
<p> 多少年来，大家一直都是在当学生写作文，今天就换一个角色，当一回老师判作文，这可绝非仅仅寻求感觉的刺激！最重要的是，我们要用上面讲的高分作文的评判标准和差作文的劣迹表现，分别对一篇漫画考题的高、低分实考样卷进行评判打分，然后“对症下药”、“量体裁衣”，才有出奇的效果啊！</p><p> <span word="As">As</span> <span word="every">every</span> <span word="thread">thread</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="gold">gold</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="valuable">valuable</span>, <span word="so">so</span> <span word="every">every</span> <span word="moment">moment</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="time">time</span>.</p><p> 一寸光阴一寸金。</p><p> 作文实例：</p><p> <span word="Directions">Directions</span>:</p><p> <span word="Study">Study</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="following">following</span> <span word="drawing">drawing</span> <span word="carefully">carefully</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="write">write</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="essay">essay</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="which">which</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="should">should</span></p><p> 终点又是新起点</p><p> 1) <span word="describe">describe</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="drawing">drawing</span>,</p><p> 2) <span word="interpret">interpret</span> <span word="its">its</span> <span word="meaning">meaning</span>, <span word="and">and</span></p><p> 3) <span word="support">support</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="view">view</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="example">example</span>.</p><p> <span word="You">You</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="write">write</span> <span word="about">about</span> 200 <span word="words">words</span> <span word="neatly">neatly</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="ANSWER">ANSWER</span> <span word="SHEET">SHEET</span> 2. (20 <span word="points">points</span>)</p><p> 高分作文：</p><p> <span word="The">The</span> <span word="cartoon">cartoon</span> <span word="depicts">depicts</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="vivid">vivid</span> <span word="picture">picture</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="which">which</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="athlete">athlete</span>, <span word="dripping">dripping</span> <span word="sweat">sweat</span>, <span word="is">is</span> <span word="rushing">rushing</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="end">end</span>. <span word="Obviously">Obviously</span>, <span word="he">he</span> <span word="wins">wins</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="match">match</span>, <span word="but">but</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="key">key</span> <span word="message">message</span> <span word="conveyed">conveyed</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="picture">picture</span>. <span word="The">The</span> <span word="most">most</span> <span word="striking">striking</span> <span word="feature">feature</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="drawing">drawing</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="same">same</span> <span word="line">line</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="marked">marked</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="both">both</span> “<span word="the">the</span> <span word="start">start</span>” <span word="and">and</span> “<span word="the">the</span> <span word="end">end</span>”, <span word="which">which</span> <span word="indicates">indicates</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="although">although</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="athlete">athlete</span> <span word="came">came</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="finish">finish</span>, <span word="a">a</span> <span word="new">new</span> <span word="race">race</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="waiting">waiting</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="him">him</span>.</p><p> <span word="The">The</span> <span word="idea">idea</span> <span word="conveyed">conveyed</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="cartoon">cartoon</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="apparent">apparent</span>: <span word="the">the</span> <span word="end">end</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="new">new</span> <span word="start">start</span>. <span word="It">It</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="widely">widely</span> <span word="accepted">accepted</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="we">we</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="satisfied">satisfied</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="present">present</span> <span word="achievement">achievement</span>, <span word="for">for</span> <span word="nowadays">nowadays</span> <span word="new">new</span> <span word="challenges">challenges</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="competition">competition</span> <span word="never">never</span> <span word="stop">stop</span>. <span word="The">The</span> <span word="market">market</span> <span word="economy">economy</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="competitive">competitive</span> <span word="society">society</span> <span word="drives">drives</span> <span word="many">many</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="studying">studying</span> <span word="hard">hard</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="higher">higher</span> <span word="academic">academic</span> <span word="degrees">degrees</span>, <span word="some">some</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="them">them</span> <span word="even">even</span> <span word="seeking">seeking</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="opportunities">opportunities</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="study">study</span> <span word="abroad">abroad</span>. <span word="We">We</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="spare">spare</span> <span word="no">no</span> <span word="efforts">efforts</span> <span word="improving">improving</span> <span word="ourselves">ourselves</span>, <span word="master">master</span> <span word="high">high</span> <span word="technology">technology</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="professional">professional</span> <span word="skills">skills</span>. <span word="Then">Then</span> <span word="we">we</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="make">make</span> <span word="use">use</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="devote">devote</span> <span word="ourselves">ourselves</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="society">society</span>.</p>
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