中考英语写作精彩点评与修改（四）
<p> 刘晓伟老师中考英语写作精彩点评与修改（四）</p><p> 中考英语写作题四（同第三题，小牛同学写的，强力推荐！）</p><p> 有些人认为中学生看电视是在浪费时间，另一些人则认为看电视对中学生是有益的。请你以<span word="Is">Is</span> <span word="Watching">Watching</span> <span word="TV">TV</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="Waste">Waste</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="Time">Time</span>为题写一篇作文。要点如下：</p><p> 1．一些人认为看电视有益，一些人则不这么认为。</p><p> 2．你的看法和理由</p><p> 学生习作及修改：</p><p> 虽然不是故意的，我又来找碴了。男子汉，别介意! ：）</p><p> （第一段：引出主题。）</p><p> <span word="As">As</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="see">see</span>，<span word="many">many</span> <span word="say">say</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="watching">watching</span> <span word="TV">TV</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="bad">bad</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="study">study</span>. <span word="But">But</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="think">think</span> <span word="it">it</span>'<span word="s">s</span> <span word="good">good</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="us">us</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="watch">watch</span> <span word="TV">TV</span> <span word="because">because</span> <span word="watching">watching</span> <span word="TV">TV</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="make">make</span> <span word="us">us</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="knowledgeable">knowledgeable</span>. (第一段先不要亮出观点，议论文有现成的思路可以继承。想要追求创新应该在第二段中体现。重改第一段：<span word="People">People</span> <span word="take">take</span> <span word="different">different</span> <span word="attitudes">attitudes</span> <span word="towards">towards</span> <span word="watching">watching</span> <span word="TV">TV</span>. <span word="Some">Some</span> <span word="believe">believe</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="beneficial">beneficial</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="us">us</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="watch">watch</span> <span word="TV">TV</span> . <span word="Others">Others</span>, <span word="however">however</span>, <span word="hold">hold</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="opposite">opposite</span> <span word="opinion">opinion</span>.)</p><p> （第二段：抛出观点。）</p><p> <span word="In">In</span> <span word="my">my</span> <span word="opinion">opinion</span>, <span word="we">we</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="realize">realize</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="pros">pros</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="cons">cons</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="watching">watching</span> <span word="TV">TV</span>. （一定要加上这一句：我们应该认识到看电视的利弊。 因为你的观点是中立的。必须首先亮出来，然后再讨论利是什么，弊是什么？最后总结一下。）</p>
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