中考英语写作精彩点评与修改（三）
<p> 刘晓伟老师中考英语写作精彩点评与修改（三）</p><p> 中考英语作文题三：</p><p> 有些人认为中学生看电视是在浪费时间，另一些人则认为看电视对中学生是有益的。请你以<span word="Is">Is</span> <span word="Watching">Watching</span> <span word="TV">TV</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="Waste">Waste</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="Time">Time</span>为题写一篇作文。要点如下：</p><p> 1．一些人认为看电视有益，一些人则不这么认为。</p><p> 2．你的看法和理由</p><p> 学生习作及修改：</p><p> <span word="Is">Is</span> <span word="Watching">Watching</span> <span word="TV">TV</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="Waste">Waste</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="Time">Time</span></p><p> <span word="Some">Some</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="think">think</span> <span word="watching">watching</span> <span word="TV">TV</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="good">good</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="children">children</span>, <span word="but">but</span> <span word="others">others</span> <span word="think">think</span> <span word="watching">watching</span> <span word="TV">TV</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="waste">waste</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="time">time</span>.</p><p> <span word="From">From</span> <span word="my">my</span> <span word="point">point</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="view">view</span>, <span word="television">television</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="playing">playing</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="very">very</span> <span word="important">important</span> <span word="role">role</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="life">life</span>, <span word="so">so</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="dont">dont</span> <span word="think">think</span> <span word="watching">watching</span> <span word="TV">TV</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="waste">waste</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="time">time</span>. <span word="It">It</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="also">also</span> <span word="learn">learn</span> <span word="much">much</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="it">it</span>. (<span word="We">We</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="learn">learn</span> <span word="much">much</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="it">it</span>.) <span word="Every">Every</span> <span word="evening">evening</span>, <span word="my">my</span> <span word="grandfather">grandfather</span> <span word="get">get</span> <span word="international">international</span> <span word="news">news</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="TV">TV</span>, <span word="he">he</span> <span word="wants">wants</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="know">know</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="newest">newest</span> <span word="massages">massages</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="world">world</span>. （两个句子不能用逗号，连接，可以合并： <span word="Every">Every</span> <span word="evening">evening</span> <span word="my">my</span> <span word="grandfather">grandfather</span> <span word="watches">watches</span> <span word="international">international</span> <span word="news">news</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="TV">TV</span>, <span word="who">who</span> <span word="wants">wants</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="know">know</span> <span word="what">what</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="happening">happening</span> <span word="around">around</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="world">world</span>.）<span word="My">My</span> <span word="mother">mother</span> <span word="loves">loves</span> <span word="animals">animals</span>, <span word="she">she</span> <span word="usually">usually</span> <span word="watches">watches</span> <span word="Animal">Animal</span> <span word="World">World</span>. <span word="Its">Its</span> <span word="too">too</span> <span word="interesting">interesting</span>. (句子合并：<span word="My">My</span> <span word="mother">mother</span> <span word="loves">loves</span> <span word="animals">animals</span>, <span word="who">who</span> <span word="usually">usually</span> <span word="watches">watches</span> <span word="Animal">Animal</span> <span word="World">World</span>. <span word="Its">Its</span> <span word="very">very</span> <span word="interesting">interesting</span>.) <span word="I">I</span> <span word="also">also</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="learn">learn</span> <span word="English">English</span> <span word="or">or</span> <span word="other">other</span> <span word="languages">languages</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="some">some</span> <span word="programs">programs</span>.</p><p> <span word="Watching">Watching</span> <span word="TV">TV</span>, <span word="I">I</span> <span word="think">think</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="good">good</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="us">us</span>. (<span word="I">I</span> <span word="think">think</span> 作为插入语放在句子的主谓之间。<span word="Watching">Watching</span> <span word="TV">TV</span>, <span word="I">I</span> <span word="think">think</span>, <span word="is">is</span> <span word="good">good</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="us">us</span>.) <span word="It">It</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="help">help</span> <span word="us">us</span> <span word="learn">learn</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="knowledges">knowledges</span> <span word="we">we</span> <span word="never">never</span> <span word="know">know</span>. (增加知识表达成：<span word="enrich">enrich</span> <span word="ones">ones</span> <span word="knowledge">knowledge</span> (不可数名词)， 可以改成：<span word="It">It</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="help">help</span> <span word="us">us</span> <span word="enrich">enrich</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="knowledge">knowledge</span> <span word="we">we</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="never">never</span> <span word="learned">learned</span>.)</p>
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