On Fridens Making
<p><span word="E">E</span>度英语网专稿 未经允许不得转载</p><p><span word="Everyone">Everyone</span> <span word="has">has</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="owe">owe</span>（<span word="own">own</span>） <span word="fridens">fridens</span> ,<span word="somebody">somebody</span> <span word="has">has</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="lot">lot</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="friendswhile">friendswhile</span> <span word="others">others</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="few">few</span>.<span word="But">But</span> <span word="everyone">everyone</span> <span word="has">has</span> <span word="at">at</span> <span word="least">least</span> <span word="one">one</span> <span word="friend">friend</span>.<span word="On">On</span>(<span word="no">no</span>) <span word="one">one</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="alone">alone</span>.</p><p> <span word="Making">Making</span> <span word="fridens">fridens</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="easy">easy</span> <span word="thing">thing</span> <span word="but">but</span> <span word="finding">finding</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="good">good</span> <span word="friden">friden</span>(<span word="friend">friend</span>) <span word="is">is</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="easy">easy</span>.<span word="A">A</span> <span word="good">good</span> <span word="friden">friden</span>(<span word="friend">friend</span>),<span word="who">who</span> <span word="must">must</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="sincere">sincere</span> <span word="person">person</span> <span word="and">and</span>(<span word="who">who</span>)<span word="we">we</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="trust">trust</span> <span word="each">each</span> <span word="other">other</span>.</p><p> <span word="Fridenship">Fridenship</span> <span word="isveryimportant">isveryimportant</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="us">us</span> <span word="because">because</span> <span word="we">we</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="share">share</span> <span word="happiness">happiness</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="sorrowis">sorrowis</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="fridens">fridens</span>.<span word="If">If</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="some">some</span> <span word="problems">problems</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="ask">ask</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="help">help</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="them">them</span>,<span word="you">you</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="talk">talk</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="take">take</span> <span word="some">some</span> <span word="advices">advices</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="friends">friends</span>.</p><p> <span word="And">And</span> <span word="if">if</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="some">some</span> <span word="happy">happy</span> <span word="things">things</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="tell">tell</span> <span word="them">them</span> ,<span word="they">they</span> <span word="must">must</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="happy">happy</span> <span word="too">too</span>.</p><p>文章整体立意没有问题，但是第二段描述找到好朋友不容易缺少支撑的观点和示例，过于单薄，另外几点建议：</p><p>1、单词的拼写要特别注意</p><p>2、定语从句的使用还没有掌握</p><p>3、标点符号和大小写要注意</p><p>批改老师：郝月菲</p><p>郝月菲，（查看郝月菲老师介绍） 英文名<span word="Hazel">Hazel</span>（被学生戏称为黑狗老师）英语专业八级，功底深厚，发音纯正，美式口语地道。毕业于北师大二附中的郝老师非常了解京城中学学生英语学习需 求，信奉实用趣味励志的英语教育理念，坚持以兴趣为主导，不断挖掘学生对于英语的热情。郝老师拥有非凡的个人魅力，幽默风趣的授课风格总能让 原本枯燥无味的英语变得趣味横生。</p>
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