Tiger is in danger
<p><span word="E">E</span>度英语网专稿 未经允许不得转载</p><p><span word="Earth">Earth</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="trouble">trouble</span>. <span word="Some">Some</span> <span word="animals">animals</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="plants">plants</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="now">now</span> <span word="disappearing">disappearing</span>. <span word="S">S</span> , <span word="such">such</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="tigers">tigers</span>.</p><p> <span word="However">However</span> <span word="Today">Today</span>, <span word="however">however</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="tigers">tigers</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="becoming">becoming</span> <span word="die">die</span> <span word="dyingout">dyingout</span>, <span word="because">because</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="killing">killing</span> <span word="them">them</span>. <span word="Animals">Animals</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="friends">friends</span>,<span word="so">so</span> <span word="we">we</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="mustprotect">mustprotect</span> <span word="them">them</span>.<span word="We">We</span> <span word="do">do</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="need">need</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="do">do</span> <span word="big">big</span> <span word="things">things</span> <span word="something">something</span> <span word="big">big</span>--<span word="we">we</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="say">say</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="just">just</span> <span word="tell">tell</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="Dont">Dont</span> <span word="killing">killing</span> <span word="tiger">tiger</span>. <span word="If">If</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="do">do</span> <span word="this">this</span>,<span word="I">I</span> <span word="think">think</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="animals">animals</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="live">live</span> <span word="better">better</span>.</p><p> <span word="Thia">Thia</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="ourEarth">ourEarth</span>.<span word="Lets">Lets</span> <span word="do">do</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="best">best</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="make">make</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="beautiful">beautiful</span>.</p><p>本文对保护老虎发表了自己的看法，立意较好。结构上基本符合总-分-总的形式，套路是正确的。以<span word="Earth">Earth</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="trouble">trouble</span>.开篇，简洁有力，让人眼前一亮。只是中间的内容显得不够充实，并希望注意表达更地道一些。</p><p><span word="Jack">Jack</span> 张</p><p>批改老师：<span word="Jack">Jack</span> 张</p><p><span word="Jack">Jack</span>张，（查看<span word="Jack">Jack</span>张老师介绍 课堂实拍），老师人称杰克船长（<span word="Captain">Captain</span> <span word="Jack">Jack</span>），毕业于北京大学，有独特的英语学习方法和备考参考技巧。张老师上课非常有激情，善于调动课堂的气氛和学生的积极性，有极强的责任感。所教导的学生无不成绩大幅提高，并真正爱上了英语学习。</p>
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