技巧分享：三大建议让雅思写作“简洁漂亮”
<p> 编辑点评：雅思写作练习时，很多考生认为长难句能够提昇文章的语言质量并因此获得更高的分数。然而有时一味地追求句子的长度反而会牺牲句子的可读性与句法准确性。</p><p> 下面我们就来看一些例子，体会一些写得并不成功的长句和如何修改的建议：</p><p> 建议一：避免空洞的单词和词组</p><p> 1.一些空洞的单词或词组根本不能为句子带来任何相关的或重要的信息，完全可以被删掉。</p><p> 比如：<span word="When">When</span> <span word="all">all</span> <span word="things">things</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="considered">considered</span>, <span word="young">young</span> <span word="adults">adults</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="today">today</span> <span word="live">live</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="satisfying">satisfying</span> <span word="lives">lives</span> <span word="than">than</span> <span word="those">those</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="parents">parents</span>, <span word="in">in</span> <span word="my">my</span> <span word="opinion">opinion</span>。</p><p> 这句话当中的<span word="when">when</span> <span word="all">all</span> <span word="things">things</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="considered">considered</span>和<span word="in">in</span> <span word="my">my</span> <span word="opinion">opinion</span>都显得多余。完全可以去掉。改为：</p><p> <span word="Young">Young</span> <span word="adults">adults</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="today">today</span> <span word="live">live</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="satisfying">satisfying</span> <span word="lives">lives</span> <span word="than">than</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="parents">parents</span>。</p><p> 2.有些空洞和繁琐的表达方式可以进行替换</p><p> 例如：<span word="Due">Due</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="fact">fact</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="grandparents">grandparents</span> <span word="were">were</span> <span word="under">under</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="obligation">obligation</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="help">help</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="parents">parents</span>, <span word="they">they</span> <span word="did">did</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="options">options</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="young">young</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="at">at</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="point">point</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="time">time</span>。</p><p> <span word="due">due</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="fact">fact</span> <span word="that">that</span>就是一个很典型的繁琐的表达方式的例子，可以替换，简化为下面的表达方式：</p><p> <span word="Because">Because</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="grandparents">grandparents</span> <span word="were">were</span> <span word="obligated">obligated</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="help">help</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="parents">parents</span>, <span word="they">they</span> <span word="did">did</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="options">options</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="young">young</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="now">now</span>。</p>
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