雅思写作连贯拿高分二关系断层的问题
<p> 除段落外，前后句子方面也会出现不连贯的地方。下面我们举一个关于男女在不同的家务活上所花费时间对比的统计图为例来说明：</p><p> <span word="Men">Men</span> <span word="spent">spent</span> <span word="most">most</span> <span word="time">time</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="gardening">gardening</span>, <span word="but">but</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="largest">largest</span> <span word="part">part</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="women">women</span> <span word="time">time</span> <span word="was">was</span> <span word="taken">taken</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="caring">caring</span> <span word="babies">babies</span>. <span word="In">In</span> <span word="contrast">contrast</span>, <span word="men">men</span> <span word="only">only</span> <span word="took">took</span> 4 <span word="minutes">minutes</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="look">look</span> <span word="after">after</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="family">family</span> <span word="elderly">elderly</span>.</p><p> 上例中的第一句因为没有上文，所以我们可以看出是比较男女在做家务方面的极值(最大值);在句式上第一句是过程，第二句是评价，句式不单调，而且中间有转折关系的连词<span word="but">but</span>，逻辑关系明确;整个句子也比较长，一个大的并列句其中还有动名词的运用，所以写得很成功。但第二句话虽然有<span word="in">in</span> <span word="contrast">contrast</span> 和前面相呼应，主语又转回<span word="men">men</span>，这样这组句子是以写男性做家务的时间安排为主要内容，还是以最大项或最小项等各个项目为线索来展开就混为一体，造成最终出现分析混乱、条理不清的问题。</p><p> 图表作文写成这样，即便单词和句法都没问题总分也会低于6分。这也可能是很多考生反映的写作感觉不错但分数压得很低的原因之一。</p><p> 解决措施一般建议把要比较的类别先写出来，如<span word="as">as</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="item">item</span> <span word="of">of</span>.../ <span word="in">in</span> 1995/ <span word="for">for</span> <span word="men">men</span>/ <span word="concerning">concerning</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="care">care</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="family">family</span> <span word="old">old</span>等，然后再写某几项的类比或者反比。在比较时切忌不要把某一项目和年限或者性别等的比较纵横交错在一起。</p>
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