雅思考生必看雅思考试完美作文9分例文
<p> 中国人写的作文有结构但语言不够地道;<span word="native">native</span> <span word="speaker">speaker</span>写的文章够地道，但不够雅思!因此，市面上总找不到完美的雅思例文。</p><p> 此次，我特别邀请我的美国朋友按照我的要求写了一些文章，这里逐一贴出来，让大家分享一下，呵呵。</p><p> <span word="Children">Children</span> <span word="who">who</span> <span word="grow">grow</span> <span word="up">up</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="families">families</span> <span word="which">which</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="short">short</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="money">money</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="better">better</span> <span word="prepared">prepared</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="deal">deal</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="problems">problems</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="adult">adult</span> <span word="life">life</span> <span word="than">than</span> <span word="children">children</span> <span word="who">who</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="brought">brought</span> <span word="up">up</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="wealthy">wealthy</span> <span word="parents">parents</span>. <span word="To">To</span> <span word="what">what</span> <span word="extent">extent</span> <span word="do">do</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="agree">agree</span> <span word="or">or</span> <span word="disagree">disagree</span>?</p><p> <span word="Some">Some</span> <span word="feel">feel</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="children">children</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="low">low</span> <span word="income">income</span> <span word="families">families</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="better">better</span> <span word="equipped">equipped</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="deal">deal</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="difficulties">difficulties</span> <span word="posed">posed</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="real">real</span> <span word="world">world</span> <span word="when">when</span> <span word="they">they</span> <span word="grow">grow</span> <span word="up">up</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="they">they</span> <span word="also">also</span> <span word="believe">believe</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="privileged">privileged</span> <span word="children">children</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="wealthy">wealthy</span> <span word="families">families</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="less">less</span> <span word="fit">fit</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="deal">deal</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="these">these</span> <span word="difficulties">difficulties</span> . <span word="The">The</span> <span word="implications">implications</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="veracity">veracity</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="argument">argument</span> <span word="seem">seem</span> <span word="self">self</span>-<span word="evident">evident</span>, <span word="but">but</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="fact">fact</span> <span word="require">require</span> <span word="closer">closer</span> <span word="examination">examination</span>.</p><p> 点评： 1+ 1模式，最后 1 句为主题句。此段的主题句稍微有点特殊，它的确否定了前面所提到的观点，从而表达出了自己的观点，此外还引出了下文。特别是最后半句： <span word="but">but</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="fact">fact</span> <span word="require">require</span> <span word="closer">closer</span> <span word="examination">examination</span> ，感觉是在抛砖引玉。</p><p> <span word="The">The</span> <span word="popular">popular</span> <span word="wisdom">wisdom</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="children">children</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="poorer">poorer</span> <span word="families">families</span> <span word="learn">learn</span> <span word="early">early</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="value">value</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="buck">buck</span>, <span word="and">and</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="thus">thus</span> <span word="naturally">naturally</span> <span word="better">better</span> <span word="suited">suited</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="stretching">stretching</span> <span word="moneywhen">moneywhen</span> <span word="times">times</span> <span word="get">get</span> <span word="tough">tough</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="adulthood">adulthood</span>. <span word="Inversely">Inversely</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="children">children</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="wealthy">wealthy</span> <span word="families">families</span>, <span word="thoseborn">thoseborn</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="silver">silver</span> <span word="spoon">spoon</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="mouths">mouths</span>, <span word="are">are</span> <span word="believed">believed</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="completely">completely</span> <span word="ignorant">ignorant</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="value">value</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="money">money</span>, <span word="having">having</span> <span word="had">had</span> <span word="everything">everything</span> <span word="provided">provided</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="them">them</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="youth">youth</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="oftentimes">oftentimes</span> <span word="erroneously">erroneously</span> <span word="expecting">expecting</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="same">same</span> <span word="situation">situation</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="adulthood">adulthood</span>. <span word="They">They</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="believed">believed</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="prone">prone</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="overspending">overspending</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="financial">financial</span> <span word="irresponsibility">irresponsibility</span>. <span word="This">This</span> <span word="belief">belief</span>, <span word="though">though</span> <span word="logical">logical</span>, <span word="overlooks">overlooks</span> <span word="one">one</span> <span word="key">key</span> <span word="point">point</span> <span word="which">which</span> <span word="is">is</span> , <span word="of">of</span> <span word="course">course</span>, <span word="education">education</span>.</p>
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