雅思写作好结尾要"画龙点睛"
<p> 应该说，中英文在议论文的结尾，还是有些微妙的差别的。雅思作文的结尾往往比开头和主题句还要重要，最起码应避免明显中式表达的痕迹，不必喊口号或者抒情。总的原则是：可以重申全文要点，可以提出具体措施，再加上地道，至少是书面语的措辞，就是一个好的雅思作文结尾!</p><p> 请看这么一道题及其结尾：</p><p> <span word="V">V</span>104 <span word="Wild">Wild</span> <span word="animals">animals</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="no">no</span> <span word="place">place</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> 21<span word="st">st</span> <span word="century">century</span>. <span word="Some">Some</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="think">think</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="preventing">preventing</span> <span word="these">these</span> <span word="wild">wild</span> <span word="animals">animals</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="dying">dying</span> <span word="out">out</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="waste">waste</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="resource">resource</span>. <span word="To">To</span> <span word="what">what</span> <span word="extent">extent</span> <span word="do">do</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="agree">agree</span> <span word="or">or</span> <span word="disagree">disagree</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="opinion">opinion</span>?</p><p> 结尾1：</p><p> <span word="Someone">Someone</span> <span word="said">said</span> <span word="safeguard">safeguard</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="wild">wild</span> <span word="animals">animals</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="waste">waste</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="resource">resource</span>, <span word="but">but</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="do">do</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="agree">agree</span>. <span word="It">It</span> <span word="seems">seems</span> <span word="we">we</span> <span word="would">would</span> <span word="spend">spend</span> <span word="some">some</span> <span word="time">time</span>, <span word="wealth">wealth</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="manpower">manpower</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="meaningless">meaningless</span> <span word="thing">thing</span>. <span word="Actually">Actually</span> <span word="we">we</span> <span word="also">also</span> <span word="do">do</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="human">human</span> <span word="being">being</span> <span word="ourselves">ourselves</span>. <span word="lets">lets</span> <span word="protect">protect</span> <span word="wild">wild</span> <span word="animals">animals</span> <span word="right">right</span> <span word="now">now</span>.</p><p> 评：结尾第一句话，是对于考官给出的观点的转述，应放在文章开头就出现。结尾不是申明中心句，而应是对全文观点的总结。大作文要收的坚定有力，<span word="seems">seems</span>让文章显得说服力不足，<span word="meaningless">meaningless</span>跟全文观点相孛。最后一句有喊口号的意味，不符合英语议论文的习惯，同样的意思可改换客观平实的文风收尾。</p><p> 结尾2：</p><p> <span word="To">To</span> <span word="sum">sum</span> <span word="up">up</span>, <span word="we">we</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="live">live</span> <span word="without">without</span> <span word="wild">wild</span> <span word="animals">animals</span> <span word="due">due</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="profound">profound</span> <span word="effects">effects</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="us">us</span>. <span word="For">For</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="reason">reason</span>, <span word="we">we</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="try">try</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="best">best</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="protect">protect</span> <span word="them">them</span>. <span word="Lets">Lets</span> <span word="remember">remember</span> <span word="one">one</span> <span word="thing">thing</span>---- <span word="protecting">protecting</span> <span word="wild">wild</span> <span word="animals">animals</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="equivalent">equivalent</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="protecting">protecting</span> <span word="ourselves">ourselves</span>.</p>
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