雅思写作官方高分范文点评
<p> <span word="When">When</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="country">country</span> <span word="develops">develops</span> <span word="its">its</span> <span word="technology">technology</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="traditional">traditional</span> <span word="skills">skills</span> <span word="and">and</span></p><p> <span word="ways">ways</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="life">life</span> <span word="die">die</span> <span word="out">out</span>. <span word="It">It</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="pointless">pointless</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="try">try</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="keep">keep</span> <span word="them">them</span> <span word="alive">alive</span>. <span word="To">To</span></p><p> <span word="what">what</span> <span word="extent">extent</span> <span word="do">do</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="agree">agree</span> <span word="or">or</span> <span word="disagree">disagree</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="opinion">opinion</span>?</p><p> 官方给出的高分答案</p><p> <span word="Overall">Overall</span>, <span word="I">I</span> <span word="disagree">disagree</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="opinion">opinion</span> <span word="expressed">expressed</span>. <span word="I">I</span> <span word="would">would</span> <span word="like">like</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="begin">begin</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="pointing">pointing</span> <span word="out">out</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="traditional">traditional</span> <span word="skills">skills</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="ways">ways</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="life">life</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="automatically">automatically</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="one">one</span> <span word="country">country</span>, <span word="but">but</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="culture">culture</span> <span word="or">or</span> <span word="community">community</span>.</p><p> <span word="In">In</span> <span word="many">many</span> <span word="ways">ways</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="history">history</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="civilization">civilization</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="history">history</span> <span word="of">of</span></p><p> <span word="technology">technology</span>: <span word="from">from</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="discovery">discovery</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="fire">fire</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="invention">invention</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="wheel">wheel</span></p><p> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="development">development</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="Internet">Internet</span>, <span word="we">we</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="been">been</span> <span word="moving">moving</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="from">from</span></p><p> <span word="previous">previous</span> <span word="ways">ways</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="doing">doing</span> <span word="things">things</span>.<span word="Some">Some</span> <span word="technologies">technologies</span>, <span word="such">such</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="weapons">weapons</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="mass">mass</span> <span word="destruction">destruction</span>, <span word="are">are</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="negative">negative</span> <span word="impact">impact</span>. <span word="Others">Others</span>, <span word="such">such</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="medical">medical</span> <span word="advances">advances</span>, <span word="positively">positively</span> <span word="help">help</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="live">live</span> <span word="better">better</span> <span word="or">or</span> <span word="longer">longer</span>, <span word="and">and</span> <span word="so">so</span> <span word="very">very</span> <span word="much">much</span> <span word="help">help</span> <span word="traditional">traditional</span> <span word="ways">ways</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="life">life</span>.</p><p> <span word="Interestingly">Interestingly</span>, <span word="technology">technology</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="positively">positively</span> <span word="contribute">contribute</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="keeping">keeping</span> <span word="alive">alive</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="traditional">traditional</span> <span word="skills">skills</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="ways">ways</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="life">life</span>. <span word="For">For</span> <span word="example">example</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="populations">populations</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="some">some</span> <span word="islands">islands</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="too">too</span> <span word="small">small</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="normal">normal</span> <span word="schools">schools</span>. <span word="Rather">Rather</span> <span word="than">than</span> <span word="breaking">breaking</span> <span word="up">up</span> <span word="families">families</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="sending">sending</span> <span word="children">children</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="mainland">mainland</span>, <span word="education">education</span> <span word="authorities">authorities</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="been">been</span> <span word="able">able</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="use">use</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="Internet">Internet</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="deliver">deliver</span> <span word="schooling">schooling</span> <span word="online">online</span>. <span word="In">In</span> <span word="addition">addition</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="Internet">Internet</span>, <span word="and">and</span> <span word="modern">modern</span> <span word="refrigeration">refrigeration</span> <span word="techniques">techniques</span>, <span word="are">are</span> <span word="being">being</span> <span word="used">used</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="keep">keep</span> <span word="alive">alive</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="traditional">traditional</span> <span word="skills">skills</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="producing">producing</span> <span word="salmons">salmons</span>; <span word="it">it</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="now">now</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="ordered">ordered</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="delivered">delivered</span> <span word="to">to</span>, <span word="anywhere">anywhere</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="world">world</span>.就是靠这个写作技法独步文坛。创作出了另世人惊奇的尤利西斯.本文中，考官通过岛屿孩子的例子说明了因特网的好处，同时又用因特网举出了另外的一个例子。明白这个 写作思路吗!<span word="A">A</span>-<span word="B">B</span> <span word="B">B</span>-<span word="C">C</span> <span word="C">C</span>-<span word="D">D</span> <span word="D">D</span>-<span word="E">E</span>，如果没有篇幅的限制，他可以任意的导出。而且他这次的例子又是那么奇怪，居然说的是因特网以及现代的冷冻技术的应用使得传统的马哈鱼加工工艺保留了下来。现在，马哈鱼可以在全球达成定购与收购)。</p>
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