雅思写作：中式思维VS英式思维举例
<p> 雅思写作中的中式思维和英式思维</p><p> <span word="bicycle">bicycle</span>作者的思路是清晰的，但表达不明确，会造成结构混乱的感觉，因此在雅思写作中应采用<span word="Why">Why</span> <span word="cycle">cycle</span>模式。下面分别列举范文说明中式思维与英式思维的不同之处。</p><p> 中式思维范文--<span word="bicycle">bicycle</span>（摘自网上雅思考生的习作）</p><p> <span word="Bicycles">Bicycles</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="become">become</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="popular">popular</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="China">China</span>. <span word="People">People</span> <span word="ride">ride</span> <span word="bikes">bikes</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="work">work</span> <span word="places">places</span>, <span word="to">to</span> <span word="shopping">shopping</span> <span word="areas">areas</span>, <span word="to">to</span> <span word="schools">schools</span>, <span word="and">and</span> <span word="so">so</span> <span word="on">on</span>. <span word="During">During</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="rush">rush</span> <span word="hours">hours</span>, <span word="you">you</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="often">often</span> <span word="see">see</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="boiling">boiling</span> <span word="sea">sea</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="bicycles">bicycles</span> <span word="running">running</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="all">all</span> <span word="directions">directions</span>. <span word="With">With</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="largest">largest</span> <span word="number">number</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="bike">bike</span> <span word="riders">riders</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="world">world</span>, <span word="China">China</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="often">often</span> <span word="referred">referred</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="kingdom">kingdom</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="bicycles">bicycles</span>.（主题句不明显，不知道作者想要说什么：自行车越来越流行，要讨论流行趋势？自行车那么多，要讨论自行车对城市的影响？中国是自行车王国，要讨论中国的自行车历史？）</p><p> <span word="Compared">Compared</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="cars">cars</span>, <span word="bikes">bikes</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="many">many</span> <span word="advantages">advantages</span>（这应该是主题句，在这么短的文章里应该放在第一段）. <span word="First">First</span>, <span word="they">they</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="very">very</span> <span word="expensive">expensive</span>, <span word="and">and</span> <span word="almost">almost</span> <span word="every">every</span> <span word="family">family</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="afford">afford</span> <span word="them">them</span>. （这句话分成2个句子比较好，一句是<span word="key">key</span> <span word="point">point</span>,一句做进一步解释）<span word="Second">Second</span>, <span word="they">they</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="very">very</span> <span word="handy">handy</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="convenient">convenient</span> <span word="though">though</span> <span word="they">they</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="so">so</span> <span word="fast">fast</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="cars">cars</span>. <span word="With">With</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="bike">bike</span>, <span word="you">you</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="go">go</span> <span word="anywhere">anywhere</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="like">like</span>, <span word="and">and</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="dont">dont</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="look">look</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="large">large</span> <span word="parking">parking</span> <span word="place">place</span>. <span word="By">By</span> <span word="riding">riding</span> <span word="bikes">bikes</span>, <span word="you">you</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="avoid">avoid</span> <span word="traffic">traffic</span> <span word="jams">jams</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="thus">thus</span> <span word="save">save</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="time">time</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="money">money</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="taking">taking</span> <span word="taxis">taxis</span>（同第一点一样，但这一点思路有些乱）. <span word="Third">Third</span>, <span word="they">they</span> <span word="do">do</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="cause">cause</span> <span word="air">air</span> <span word="or">or</span> <span word="sound">sound</span> <span word="pollution">pollution</span>（?? <span word="Riding">Riding</span> <span word="bikes">bikes</span> <span word="does">does</span> <span word="good">good</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="health">health</span> <span word="if">if</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="ride">ride</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="regularly">regularly</span>（这应该是文章要论述的第四点，但没有连接词，又分了段，打乱了文章的整体结构）. <span word="In">In</span> <span word="modern">modern</span> <span word="times">times</span>, <span word="people">people</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="usually">usually</span> <span word="too">too</span> <span word="busy">busy</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="spare">spare</span> <span word="any">any</span> <span word="time">time</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="physical">physical</span> <span word="exercise">exercise</span>. <span word="Riding">Riding</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="bike">bike</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="work">work</span> <span word="place">place</span> <span word="regularly">regularly</span> <span word="serves">serves</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="good">good</span> <span word="way">way</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="keep">keep</span> <span word="yourself">yourself</span> <span word="strong">strong</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="healthy">healthy</span>. （? 2个句子的顺序换一下比较好。因为前面已经说了有益于健康，读者等着听解释，但作者却换了话题。第一句话应该是第二句话的原因。）</p>
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