sat作文修改.Whatmotivatespeopletochange?Humanhavethebestandtheworthiestqualityatthesametime,andinmyopinion,theyallcomefromdesire.Becauseofdesire,peoplebegintoseek,tochase.Peopleallhavedreams,howevernoteve
<p>问题：sat作文修改.Whatmotivatespeopletochange?Humanhavethebestandtheworthiestqualityatthesametime,andinmyopinion,theyallcomefromdesire.Becauseofdesire,peoplebegintoseek,tochase.Peopleallhavedreams,howevernoteverybodyisabl<p>答案：↓↓↓<p class="nav-title mt10" style="border-top:1px solid #ccc;padding-top: 10px;">孙艺红的回答：<div class="content-b">网友采纳 首先,worthiest是不是应该是worst.Peopleallhavedreams,howevernot everybodyisabletoachievethedream,andbecauseofdesire,peoplelearnto changethemselves.改成Eventhoughnoteveryoneisabletoacheivetheirdreams,becauseoftheirdesirefortheirdreams,peoplewilltrytochange.这里让步比转折更能表达你的观点.另外,你的第一个例子并不是changethemselves而是改变了大环境,所以change就够了. 第二,例子选的不是很好,最好避免关于美国历史的讨论,因为你绝对不会比美国人更了解他们的历史,如果有错会大大地扣分的,因为这使得你的论据和论点并不互相支持. 还有,字数太少了.至少需要两个例子,开头和结尾需要更详细的解释.比如Asitissaid,tochangeistorisksomething.前需要铺垫.Peopleneverknowachangeispositiveornegative,but“desire”doeshavethestrength不和主题.你在讨论motivationtochange而不是change是否正确.例子之前也需要过渡,大概就说两句像‘desire可以让人改编社会环境,就比如美国南北战争’之类的引入.
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